I want as much feedback as possible please.

This show has a start, but never a climax
I think it's time to present the facts
You're the one everyone came to see
You're the star of my show
See you're name up in lights, baby you're the main event
Watch them glow, you're the main attraction
Didnt think you cared, how wrong could I have been?
You're eyes..the most beautiful things I've ever seen
The glitz and glamour, you're all round shine
The only thing I need is for you to be mine
They see the twinkle in you're eye, it's no wonder they love you
Got them all under you're spell, there you're's for the taking
The magician..unleash you're spell-binding spells
A wink and a smile, that's enough to make them fall head over heels
You get you're fair share of coins in the cup, got everyone lining up, no need for good luck
They all wanna peak, to see what all the fuss is over
Then they see, it becomes clear there's a star amongst
You're the reason I haven't crashed and burnt, that honour you've earnt
You're the one everyone came to see, you're the Star Of My Show.

aww, i really like this, you may have to re think the structure a bit though, it doesnt seem to flow too easily but other than that, i loved it!!

great poem, keep writing!

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Thanks, appreciate it.

yeah i hit some rough spots wit tha flow also...
passed all that, its a very beautiful poem laker!!
keep it up. =p

Thanks Pepper.

Anymore feedback? Please.

ya it was good...the flow was a little off but other than that it was nice
keep doin ya thang

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Thanks dude, I appreciate it.